Critique please

[Anonymous]

Comments / suggestions

[Shivang Rajvir]

Have you used Sun & Sky object?

[Anonymous]

Someone has stolen all your furniture.

Dwight would probably suggest (among other things) a window light or similar towards the entrance door to draw your eye and make it more inviting. Furniture inside, or darker more reflective glass (or both) would help reduce the flatness.

Nice hedge though.

[Anonymous]

Make it look like Christchurch- The blue sky is good but put a hint of the mountains in the background or reflected in the windows or something.

This could be anywhere- at first I thought it was Rototuna, Hamilton
Or perhaps Howick.

Not Wellington though- Sky too blue; site too horizontal.

[Anonymous]

Not too sure who your client is, but I would suggest amping up the landscape design - you are showing the outside, so take care to address this. For instance... your trees are planted right next to the house. This is a no-no... ask any landscape architect. General rule : the distance from the house to the trunk should be 1 1/2 times the diameter of the species mature crown size. That will likely mean placing more 'shrubbery' along the house.

What about adding a winding entry to the house with an adjoining hedge element? Maybe change the time of day too enhance the shadows, and BRING THE ENTRY FORWARD! Looks like a cave....

Otherwise, great start!

[Dwight]

Here i am after a day without Archicad Talk because the sever wouldn't connect. All youse guyz with your Archicad 12 announcement comments flying. Aren't we all a bunch of happy campers?

And we are also hosting the house painters from hell. DON'T HIRE THE STUDENT PAINTERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What was i thinking?

A great thing about renderings is they reveal design shortcomings.

Naturally, you've asked mainly for LightWorks suggestions, but our colleagues correctly indicate landscape design flaws.

It is hard to present this structure well because of the recessed entryway. Not friendly. The illustration also presents a barrier to the eye entering the scene because the path to the doorway is torturous. Got to get around that hedge. Your client will benefit from a proper path to the street and a gateway. The elements will graphically assist your design and mitigate the deep entryway. Imagine arriving at this building from the left. Where is the door?

As for lighting, it seems okay, and your grass texture doesn't repeat. You could add a little yellow to the sun, altho you are pretty close to Lower Hutt where our colleague Bruce "White Light" Haniel says the sun is the whitest ever and i am inclined to agree.

As for the rendering showing design flaws, it is obvious that you need some visual interest at the front of the structure unless your clients are Quakers. We like things plain. Can you do some woodwork around the vents? The car door is ominously dark - Could we go to white or a wood grain? Maybe some glass in the door?

And yes, you need to get some light on the entry door or i am not going down that tunnel for fear of a mugging.

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[Anonymous]

I agree with the other suggestions especially about the garage door, door and window frames.....I would experiment with some lighter colors on all of these components. What I like to use for glass is more of a dark transparent material. But there are so many other choices to choose from...it depends on what you like best..or what compliments your rendering best.

[Anonymous]

house

[Anonymous]

Seems better, one note though:

I like the 'tone' on the shadows of the 1st rendering....the shadows here in my opinion become too dark.

[Anonymous]

I agree with the last comment, the shadows are too dark.

The house itself looks OK. Its better in the first rendering. The entry path, car and sky is better in the second.

The landscaping needs larger background trees. Perhaps a low picket fence would add more character than the hedge at the front.