!Restored: Critiques Wanted Please!

[Anonymous]

This is the courtyard entering a dentist office I have just finished. Let me know what I can do to make it better. I used Artlantis 2.0, and a couple of touchups in Lightroom.

Justin

[Anonymous]

Sjaak,

No offence, but, I am looking for constructive criticism, not personal dislikes. I had just implemented what the owner had the Landscape Architect draw up. I may not like it, but it is what makes the owner happy that counts.

Justin

[Karl Ottenstein]

Well, I think this is a big improvement, Justin. Road texture/stripe really help - but as Dwight suggests, the double-yellow says that the black car is in a motion-lane, not a parking lane, and so fear runs rampant at this driverless car moving down the street. 😉

If in reality, there is parking in front, then change the stripe perhaps, or...?

Black car doesn't bother me that much - to my eye, it does not create a focal point - the shimering building takes my focus, with the purple irises drawing me towards the courtyard. A brighter color car would distract me. Different strokes, I guess.

Yeah, fire hydrant is a distraction. If there really is a hydrant on the site there, I would hope that the client can afford to pay to re-plumb it to a stand pipe mounted on the exterior of the building. For illustrative purposes, you could just ditch it. You're not showing red curb there either which would only distract more from the image. Or, apply a very desaturated red so that the hydrant doesn't dominate the scene.

I, too, like the sharp-edged parapet here. With a slope to the parapet cap towards the roof, I really don't see wall drip-stain as an issue.

I disagree with friend Sjaak - we don't really know what species those trees are; could be some dwarf thing. What bothers me is that you still need to use the mirror checkbox to flip them around a bit so that we don't have three in a row with the same orientation.

You did well with the shader on the metal. Another new Artlantis 2 feature that I cannot recall being mentioned recently is that Artlantis 2 has matte reflections, illustrated nicely here (street-tree towards left end of building and flowers).

Artlantis sky looks nice. Beautiful glowing look to it.

One design thing that bugs me is that the horizontal corrugated steel that is on the wall of the low bumpout facing the courtyard shows the ribby corrugation from this angle. I think it would be cleaner and speak to the sharp edged language of the building if that dove into an extension of the adjacent wall (or something).

Any Photoshop work here, or is this straight from Artlantis 2?

Cheers,
Karl

[Dwight]

You all go and laugh at the driverless car as a superfluous observation, but remember me because where i come from some schludentz who has nothing else to contribute will someday derail your presentation by interrupting you with a "there's no driver in that car."

It can happen.

As for the car color - try sameasthebuilding grey.

[Anonymous]

This side of the building is much more interesting! I tend to agree that the fire hydrant is a distraction being in the middle (I think the woman too).

I don't mind the black car per se, but black black of the paint with the white grill is the contrasty part of the rendering and that is where your eye is drawn. The most amount of color and contrast are the non building items like the woman, hydrant and the car.

I would still like to see the main face of the building be lighter and have the most amount of contrast. I think that would draw you eye to the building and show off the form better.

Thanks for sharing your work.

Don Lee

[Anonymous]

No offence taken,

Sjaak needs to introduce himself.

I happen to be landscape designer by profession. I know which trees are used in the image. Those are ashtrees. A fully grown ashtree will measure 20m in height. You don't want to use trees like that in that situation. If the client hired a landscaper for that job........what do I need to say.

Sjaak

[Dwight]

An illustrations needs a sense of "rightness."

More that showing the building, like a hollywood starlet would say "get my best side," the image must be free of glitches.

If one person sees a problem, it is a REAL problem that others will also see, to the detriment of the sale.

We sometimes place entourage carelessly. Branches slapping pedestrians in the face can be irksome. But you just can't put things in a shot without thinking about the "story." "Runaway car" or "gomers out for a walk," people who aren't enamored by architecture [most of them] closely study surrounding elements looking for flaws. Or maybe it is just my mother who does this.

[Anonymous]

Mothers, mothers in law....and landscape designers.

Right, I am not an archtict but work together with architects. If architecture and landscape do not fit to eachother then together we are making something horrible. Tough discussions are on the road we choose.
Good designs are the result.

Sjaak

[Karl Ottenstein]

Sjaak wrote:
Sjaak needs to introduce himself.

Sjaak should also note that he is the moderator of the Artlantis forums. 😉

Cheers,
Karl

[Anonymous]

OK Ok , yes I am moderator of the ArtLantisforums. Abvent asked me to moderate their forums so people can expect faster answers to their questions. I do not pretend to know everything but do my best to help where I can.

Abvent also asked me to visit other forums where Artlantis is discussed. That is why I joined this forum. So every now and then I will drop a note when visitors here have questions about ArtLantis.
Not that I am needed much here. It was a pleasant surprise to meet some familiar faces here, Karl, Dwight, Djordje. People whom I consider to be real experts when it comes to using Artlantis. The ArchiCAD community is served well in these forums.

Must say that I like this community. Nice, friendly, professional. It is a pleasant experience to read what is going on here.

Anyone having questions about ArtLantis can ask them here or on the ArtLantis forums. I will be browsing here as well to see what I can do.

Regards

Sjaak

[Anonymous]

Having visited other forums, i would say the promptness, openess, friendliness, quality of advice is exceptional. I have learnt ArchiCAD virtually thru this forum and still learning.
regards