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Necko
Hi Necko,
Good to hear from you again.
You asked, so please take this as a critique (which is just an opinion!) and not criticism.
- color tone/density of image doesn't make sense with the sky chosen (sunrise/sunset because of the pink clouds). If really that time of day, the left face of the building would have more ambient light on it and the tone of the image (notably the concrete/etc) would be much warmer.
- The angle of light on the bitmap trees doesn't match the angle of light (and color of light) on the building.
- Because the face of the building that we see is lit somewhat, I assume that the sun is rising or setting behind me ... and so the colored clouds are what we call 'alpenglow' here - reflected color seen in the mountains. If the sun is behind me, then the only way the building would have so little light on it with the sky looking that way is if there is also a mountain behind me and the sun has not come up over the mountain. If that's true, then the lighting is fine.😉 One of Dwight's rules that I like, though, is to show things as they will be remembered, not as they are. Chances are someone would remember such a dawn (or sunset) scene as brighter than what we see here.
- the image has no focal point, as the building has no discernable entry (feng shui "mouth"). Perhaps remove some trees - or make them semitransparent - and use a splash of sunlight over the entry area.
- speaking of 'entrance' - the chain that runs along the roadway has no break in it, so there is no way for a stopping car to let a passenger out who would then walk into the building (without stepping over the chain). The scene needs an 'invitation' to the viewer, not a roadblock.
- the camera position feels like it is about 1m off the ground. Consider raising it to human height.
- sky looks like it was processed in PS with the 'emboss' filter. If anything it should be softer. Consider blurring the foreground sidewalk in PS a bit too to define a focal plain around the building.
- Dwight's trick: foreground is too light and might be darkened from the lower edge up with a gradient, again to add focus on the subject
- another Dwight rule: add 'noise' to your sidewalk texture ... looks way too smooth.
- Is the low structure with the blue roof at left (a bus stop?) important? If not, crop in more on your building.
- the car seems out of focus, rather than motion-blurred. A common motion-blur trick is to blur the trailing edges of things, but keep the leading edges more in focus ... and to even smear the trailing pixels like in a cartoon.
- the scene still feels a little sterile even after all of the above because there is no life (other than the speeding car). But, perhaps no people are awake at this early hour of the morning?
Just my opinion, and only because you asked.😉
Karl
Good to hear from you again.
You asked, so please take this as a critique (which is just an opinion!) and not criticism.
- color tone/density of image doesn't make sense with the sky chosen (sunrise/sunset because of the pink clouds). If really that time of day, the left face of the building would have more ambient light on it and the tone of the image (notably the concrete/etc) would be much warmer.
- The angle of light on the bitmap trees doesn't match the angle of light (and color of light) on the building.
- Because the face of the building that we see is lit somewhat, I assume that the sun is rising or setting behind me ... and so the colored clouds are what we call 'alpenglow' here - reflected color seen in the mountains. If the sun is behind me, then the only way the building would have so little light on it with the sky looking that way is if there is also a mountain behind me and the sun has not come up over the mountain. If that's true, then the lighting is fine.
- the image has no focal point, as the building has no discernable entry (feng shui "mouth"). Perhaps remove some trees - or make them semitransparent - and use a splash of sunlight over the entry area.
- speaking of 'entrance' - the chain that runs along the roadway has no break in it, so there is no way for a stopping car to let a passenger out who would then walk into the building (without stepping over the chain). The scene needs an 'invitation' to the viewer, not a roadblock.
- the camera position feels like it is about 1m off the ground. Consider raising it to human height.
- sky looks like it was processed in PS with the 'emboss' filter. If anything it should be softer. Consider blurring the foreground sidewalk in PS a bit too to define a focal plain around the building.
- Dwight's trick: foreground is too light and might be darkened from the lower edge up with a gradient, again to add focus on the subject
- another Dwight rule: add 'noise' to your sidewalk texture ... looks way too smooth.
- Is the low structure with the blue roof at left (a bus stop?) important? If not, crop in more on your building.
- the car seems out of focus, rather than motion-blurred. A common motion-blur trick is to blur the trailing edges of things, but keep the leading edges more in focus ... and to even smear the trailing pixels like in a cartoon.
- the scene still feels a little sterile even after all of the above because there is no life (other than the speeding car). But, perhaps no people are awake at this early hour of the morning?
Just my opinion, and only because you asked.
Karl
Thx man for your answer ! I will do that in next days and i will post my result. This is first test image and i have to adjust light, materials, etc.
Sky is created in Aurora and i love it becouse it is so creazy but in one other forum people suggest me to remove car, put some people, and change the sky.
So see ya !
Necko
Sky is created in Aurora and i love it becouse it is so creazy but in one other forum people suggest me to remove car, put some people, and change the sky.
So see ya !
Necko
O.K., if I must be critical.
This building angle is much better. Typical eye path of viewer shown on image in RED. Now it is correct composition, previous angle really hurt.
Sky in corner too large, needs interest, clouds - just a touch. The red brick is too hot, look even my garish red arrow dissappears on the surface. Tilt angle to include more foreground and place pedestrians in crosswalk, walking mostly toward the building. No cars, but all building in background, city scape.
Add some trees back in, water them twice a week.
This building angle is much better. Typical eye path of viewer shown on image in RED. Now it is correct composition, previous angle really hurt.
Sky in corner too large, needs interest, clouds - just a touch. The red brick is too hot, look even my garish red arrow dissappears on the surface. Tilt angle to include more foreground and place pedestrians in crosswalk, walking mostly toward the building. No cars, but all building in background, city scape.
Add some trees back in, water them twice a week.
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